What can you do?

1.1.1 Prewriting:

___ Analyzes and selects effective strategies for generating ideas and planning writing.

___ Gathers information (e.g., takes notes) from a variety of sources

1.2.1 Drafts:

___ Analyzes task and composes multiple drafts when appropriate.

1.3.1 Revises text, including changing words, sentences, paragraphs, and ideas. 3.2.2 ·

Survivor and Poetry

___ Changes or add words: description

___ Changes or add words: vivid verbs

___ Changes or add words: nifty nouns

___ Changes or add words: simile

___ Changes or add words: alliteration

_ Changes or add words: assonance

_ Change/add words: setting --where, when, culture (live/think/believe)

___ Changes or add words: characters (dialogue, actions)

3.2.2 Analyzes and selects language appropriate for specific audiences and purposes.

Selects and uses precise language in poetic and narrative writing.

See 1.3.1 for narrative survivor writing and:

___ Selects and uses literary devices (e.g., metaphor, symbols, analogies).

___ Plans and Organizes plot (exposition, rising action, climax, denoument)

___ Plans theme in story

___ Onomatopoeia (words that sound the sound; sound what they mean; splat)

___ Heart and Feeling

___ Senses (sights, sounds, smells, tastes, touch)

___ Repeated consonants

___ Repeated vowels

See 1.3.1 and for poetry: (See pages 194-5 Write Source 2000)

Selects and uses sound devices in prose and poetry

___ Repeated words

___ Repeated consonants

___ Repeated vowels

___ Rhyme words

___ Onomatopoeia (words that sound the sound; sound what they mean; splat)

___ Heart and Feeling

___ Senses (sights, sounds, smells, tastes, touch)

___ Line breaks and forms

___ Component 4.1: Analyzes and evaluates others’ and own writing. Uses this checklist.

Title-down poem

Cough

Outside shivering

Leaves crrruuuunch

Dead under the snow.

List poem

Cold is the tingle in the tips of your fingers.

Cold is the sniffle in your reddened nose.

Cold is the should of your friend turning away.

Cold is the snow, fallen softly: the world froze.

Flash

Verbs

Verb Test:

Let us _____________________.

Yesterday, I _______________.

Underline the vivid verbs in the stories. Discuss.

What can we learn about writing fiction from these story verbs?

What can we learn about writing fiction from these story verbs?

Verbs

Verb Test:

Let us _____________________.

Yesterday, I _______________.

Underline the vivid verbs in the stories. Discuss.

** What can we learn about writing fiction from these story verbs?

answer, answered, unanswered, buckle, buckling, unbuckled, cover,covering, uncovered, coverage, dining, nine, ninety, forty, forty-eight, duplicate, duplication reduplicated duplication, embarrass,embarrassing

* Skillbook pages 71-74; 75-78: Subject/Predicate; clauses/phrases

* Prompt: Write a nomination speech explaining why a person you know deserves an “Appreciation Award.”

Thoughtful Thursday

Word Origins

Today, learn the origins of five different words from your spelling list. You will need a dictionary. If you don’t have a dictionary at home, go to study hall in the morning.

Directions:

1. Choose five different words. (The base words are different.)

2. Write one of those words.

3. Write its base word.

4. Look up the base word in the dictionary.

5. Find its word origin (English, French, Latin, Greek, etc.)

6-8. Write the language origin, the origin words, and their definitions.

9. Repeat 2-8 for each of your five words.

Example:

1. First word chosen: “theory”

2. Write one of the words: theory

3. Write its base word: theorem

4. Look up the base word in the dictionary.

5. Find its word origin: Greek

6-8 Write the language origin, the origin words, their definitions:

6 Greek 7 theoria 8 to look at (I had to look up the base word theorum to find the meaning).

Are you ready for Friday’s test?

* Skillbook pages 71-74: Subject/Predicate

* Prompt: Write a nomination speech explaining why a person you know deserves an “Appreciation Award.”

* Spelling

Wordy Wednesday

Practice getting to know your words.

1. Say each of your spelling words in parts. These do NOT need to be correct syllables.

Examples:

Exercise ex er cise

Certain cer tain

Forcible forc I ble

Efficient e ffi cient

2. For each of twelve of your hardest words, do the following:

a. Write the word.

b. Say the word and count the word parts

c. Draw a line for each word part

d. Say the word again, and write each part as you say it.

e. Say the word again, writing it as one word as you say the parts.

f. Example:

a. Exercise

b. “ex” “er” “cise” 3

c. ex/er/cise

d. “exercise” ex er cise

e. “exercise” exercise

Exercise exercise

Certain certain

Forcible forcible

Efficient efficient

Leaf leaf

Affixes

Write Source 328-331

Spelling c/g ly ed s

ceiling

damage damages damaged

deceive deceived

evidence evident evidently

forcible forcibly

instance instances

mileage

procedure procedures procedurally

violence violently

wreckage

__Sentence structure__

Composing Write Source 85-92; 434-438

Today's focus: 434-5;

Skillbook: 69-70

All sentences must have a subject and a predicate (verb).

Can dogs fly?

Who or what? dogs = subject

What do dogs do? fly? = verb (predicate)

Figurative Language

Figurative Language 2

Note: We will be revising and finalizing this essay on Friday and Monday. Essays are due Monday at the end of class. Only assignments turned in on due dates can be revised for a better grade. If you are behind, work at home.

Try your hardest and do your best.

Stay focused and think carefully.

Complete and turn in work on time.

Ask questions when needed.

Help others and yourself to learn.

Listen.

Participate appropriately (independently, partners, teams).

Work on task.

Manage yourself.

Keep your work, folders, materials organized.

Prepare for classes with supplies, completed assignments.

Use your planner.

Respect all persons, spaces, feelings, property.

Be courteous to all.

Follow directions and corrections without comment.

Treat others with kindness and respect.

Be courteous to all.

Encourage others.

Include all in groups.

Take care of property.

Organize your own areas and work.

Put litter in its place.

Handle equipment safely and carefully.

Leave others' property alone.

Note: We will be revising and finalizing this essay on Thursday and Friday. Only assignments turned in on due dates can be revised for a better grade. If you are behind, work at home.

Val

Speaks in soft tones

In the lazy afternoon with sunlight streaming in

To the dining hall, as steaks simmer.

She encourages us to follow our dreams and our native traditions.

Eldin

Stands proud and strong

In the early morning of grey clouds

After the breakfast in the meal site.

He shares to never give up, even what life is tough, like boot camp.

Gary

Thin, soft-spoken, shares his thrill as Olympic torch runner

In the crazy afternoon of ping! Ping! Pouring rain

Under the wooden-beamed roof of the mess hall.

He says, “Keep going. Never give up.”

Revision:

REVISE:

Where can you add details?

Where can you cut clutter -- duplicated information?

Where can you change words to strong verbs, precise nouns, alliteration, assonance?

Can you combine sentences? Shorten sentences? Rearrange sentence structure to start sentences differently?

Introduction:

Title : What slogan or words have you mentioned in your paragraphs would make a good title?

Grabber Beginning : What detail, question, or quote from LC can you include to grab your reader's attention?

Background Information : Your reader needs to know what Leadership Camp is. Explain in a summary statement(s) what Leadership Camp is.

Slogan : Do you want to include a slogan here? Or wait until the end?

Thesis Statement : What is your goal from Leadership Camp?

REVISE:

Where can you add details?

Where can you cut clutter -- duplicated information?

Where can you change words to strong verbs, precise nouns, alliteration, assonance?

Can you combine sentences? Shorten sentences? Rearrange sentence structure to start sentences differently?

Title : What slogan or words have you mentioned in your paragraphs would make a good title?

Grabber Beginning : What detail, question, or quote from LC can you include to grab your reader's attention?

Background Information : Your reader needs to know what Leadership Camp is. Explain in a summary statement(s) what Leadership Camp is.

Slogan : Do you want to include a slogan here? Or wait until the end?

Thesis Statement : What is your goal from Leadership Camp?

Read sample poems from students in class.

Use your Write Source 2000 for poem ideas.

Go to: 5W, Echoic, Window Poems for directions and samples.

Poem Ideas: Snap a picture of a scene from LC that relates to your essay. Use that picture to describe the imagery (senses) of that scene.

Proofread : to correct errors in writing; correct spelling, capitalization, punctuation, grammar, paragraphing, legibility; in school, we call this editing for conventions of writing.

Revise : to rewrite for clarity and details; make the writing flow from idea to idea through organizational and sentence fluency changes. Add more details to create images in the reader's mind. Cut extra, non-important information; cut clutter. Change words for clarity and details. In journalism, this is called editting. Refer to the progression of essays about the veterinarian.

Paragraph 2—event/activity that helped you choose your goal—imagery /slogan/ explanation event/activity that helped you choose your goal

Transition As a result

Topic Sentence Jane Snow convinced me to stay away from drugs.

Concrete Detail Jane Snow spoke about the harmful effects of drugs and the positive effects of healthy choices. She was tall with long brown hair and brown eyes. The sun shone on her face.

Commentary First, she explained how drugs affect your body and your family,

Commentary For example, some drugs make you hyper so you cannot attend to basic needs like eating and exercise. You can’t even learn because you can’t focus. Also, your family begins to gripe at you, and you start griping back.

Concrete Detail Next, Jane stressed the healthy choices.

Commentary Exercise is important to stay fit. It’s also a great hobby.

Commentary Healthy foods keep you well.

Clincher Healthy Body; Healthy Mind

Write Paragraph : As a result of the presentation by Jane Snow, I am convinced to stay away from drugs. Jane Snow spoke about the harmful effects of drugs and the positive effects of healthy choices. She stood up straight and tall. She gestured with her hands to emphasize important points, and her long brown hair waved with her passionate words. Her dark brown eyes connected with all of us. Her face shone brightly in the afternoon light, and her words sparkled with hope. We sat still, glued to her ideas like honey to bread as we learned the sweet truth about positive living. First, she explained how drugs affect your body and your family. For example, some drugs make you hyper so you cannot attend to basic needs like eating and exercise. You can’t even learn because you can’t focus. Also, your family begins to gripe at you, and you start griping back. It’s a vicious cycle where everyone is hurt. Next, Jane stressed the healthy choices. Exercise is important to stay fit. It’s also a great hobby. Hobbies keep you active. Physical health builds energy so you have more energy for real fun with your sports and hobbies. Healthy foods keep you well. When drugs fill your life, you loose the fun of friends and sports, and the physical health to stay well. Jane convinced me to choose a healthy lifestyle and better friends. Not only will I have a healthy body, but I will also have a healthy mind. In fact, my motto could be “Healthy Body; Healthy Mind; Healthy Family and Friends.”

Paragraph 1 Ideas for goal (what you hope to achieve) and action steps to meet goal:

Transition How will I use my leadership camp training?

Topic Sentence I will choose to live a drug-free life.

Concrete Detail First, I will learn several hobbies.

Commentary Hobbies will keep my busy. I won’t have time for drugs.

Commentary Some hobbies I can choose include beading, sports, and reading. I can learn to bead gifts for friends or to start a craft business. Sports like basketball and volleyball keep me active and healthy. Reading provides an escape of the imagination.

Concrete Detail Second, I will choose friends who will honor my decision. A good friend appreciates me for who I am and does not push me into popping pills.

Commentary I will accept my friends for who they are, but I will make my own decisions that affect my health and safety.

Clincher Hobbies and good friends create a fence against drug use.

Write Paragraph : How will I use my leadership camp training? I will choose to live a drug-free life. One step to staying drug-free includes learning several hobbies. Hobbies will keep my busy. I won’t have time for drugs. Some hobbies I can choose include beading, sports, and reading. I can learn to bead gifts for friends or to start a craft business. Sports like basketball and volleyball keep me active and healthy. Reading provides an escape of the imagination. Another step towards a drug-free live is to choose friends who will honor my decision. A good friend appreciates me for who I am and does not push me into popping pills. Instead, they will join me in my hobbies. I will probably enjoy many different friends if I expand my life to include many hobbies. In addition, I will accept my friends for who they are, but I will always make my own decisions that affect my health and safety. If tempted, I will remind myself, “Lead yourself and younger kids into the future: Be a role model.” I can also say to my tempters, “I choose to control myself, not let drugs control me.” Then I will walk away. Hobbies and good friends will control my life, not drugs.